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Friday, 2 August 2019

The Seat by the Window


It was her lucky day; she’d got a seat by the window after ages and was gazing idly at the rather unsightly view outside. The train had stopped at Kurla station, notorious for overwhelming crowds, where a thousand got off each compartment while a thousand more got in, all in a matter of a few seconds. The station was a rampage with each person jostling to find their way towards or away from the train. With a lurch the train started again and she caught sight of man staring intently at her from the now rapidly disappearing platform. She brushed it off as a figment of her imagination and concentrated on the open book on her lap. 
The next day she got a side seat, after having stood for a good 40 mins. At Kurla station she noticed the man from the previous day desperately scanning the ladies compartment. She continued to observe him as she was sure he couldn't see her seated all the way inside. The train moved and the man looked angry and frustrated. 

The following weeks, the train was so crowded that she had the misfortune of being stranded at the entrance of the compartment, unable to plough her way inside. She could feel the intense scrutiny of the same man's eyes on her from the platform, standing at the same spot. She pretended to be unaware of his gaze but managed to sneak peeks from lowered lashes. He was probably in his 30's, of an average height and built, fair complexioned, always dressed in kurta and jeans, sporting a stubble and disheveled hair, a rather ordinary looking man except for his furtive eyes and thick brows. It made her very uncomfortable, this stalking. God knew, since when it had been going on. She was aware that she wasn’t a classic beauty but something about her made heads turn wherever she went. Maybe it was the trendy clothes she wore or the way she carried herself. She started wearing dull conservative clothes, no make-up, but still nothing changed; the man persisted with his ogling.
This could not continue, she thought worriedly and decided to change tack. She took the ladies compartment located in the front. As the train entered the crowded Kurla station, she spotted the stalker. He looked at his watch and started scanning the train, waiting for the ladies compartment in the rear. She was wary yet a thrill passed through her; she'd managed to give the stalker a slip.
The next day, she was innocuously seated in a middle seat in the front ladies compartment. Her heart jumped to her mouth when she perceived disapproving eyes boring into hers. The lecher had somehow figured out her plan and taken the adjoining men's compartment and was now staring at her through the metal mesh partition.
Thoroughly rattled, she stopped taking the train altogether and resorted to cumbersome bus routes instead. 
A couple of months passed in sheer agony of travelling in overcrowded buses stuck in traffic jams and she desperately hoped that the creep at Kurla station would have given up the idea of stalking her by now.

Today, she got into the train at Tilak Nagar, a station before Kurla station. All the daily commuters were pleasantly surprised to see a brand new train and empty at that, rumble into the platform. It was fresh and clean from the railway yard.
She was pushed into the ladies compartment in a swirling mass of arms and bodies and wonder of wonders; she bagged an empty seat near the window. The new train, its spanking upholstery and trimmings, made for an excited buzz of conversation in the ladies compartment.
The train rolled next into Kurla station and to her horror, she saw the wretched man there. Restlessly striding and watching with furtive eyes. When he caught sight of her sitting by the window, his expression changed to one of fury. He looked every inch crazed and psychopathic!
It terrified her when she saw him approach her at a run, wildly pushing through the crowd. She cowered and sat away from the window, her spine and head plastered to the back of her seat.
With a cry of rage he pulled out a bottle from his pant pocket and flung its contents towards her just as the train pushed forward.
Acrid, vile liquid oozed down the closed clear glass shutters of the now fast accelerating new train. A collective loud shout passed through the compartment as her co-passengers noticed what had just happened.
She’d just escaped an acid-attack, by freak luck, courtesy Indian Railways.


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I am participating in the #WordsMatter Blog Hop. The prompt for this month was "Outside My Window".
I received this tag from Amrita Basu at Healthwealthbridge. It's my pleasure to pass on this tag to Jyothi Nair at Shortened Tales.
There are 47 of us on this Blog Hop and it will be spread over 3 days - 2,3, 4 August. Do follow the #WordsMatter Blog Hop and prepare to be surprised!




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Oh my God! I surely didn't expect that ending! It was nice travelling on this train with you though. I really enjoyed the visuals and details. Looks like you could add a sequel as to why the man did that!!!
OMG!! Didnt see that coming!! You have captured the sad reality of our times beautifully and vividly! A great take on the prompt, Kala.
OMG! I couldn't breathe in till the time I read the last sentence. I read and reready multiple times just to be sure you know
Stalking is every commuter’s nightmare and acid attacks are simply too horrible to understand. What thrills do such people get by damaging and destroying a poor person’s life. Thank God for the protection that automatic door provided.
You had me rooted. Never saw that coming.
It beats me why people (read strangers) turn evil and attempt hurting others. Glad she escaped the attack. Looking up for a sequel now.
OMG!! it was scary. But your post also brought back my memories of Kurla station. I used to take a train from Vashi and get down at Kurla and then take a bus for my office. Every day there used to be so much rush. Getting down from the train and reaching the FOB always created a stampede like situation. When I got pregnant, I had to quit my job only because of Kurla station.
I was glued to the narrative and didn't waver until i reached the end of it. Never bitting piece, Kala. I don't know if it is a right way to put it, but, it felt like i was the girl who sat by the window!
Oh God! Kurla does give me the creeps. Now I will be wary of the window seat
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Shalini R · 299 weeks ago

Holy $h!t! That was scary! Oh God! This is hatke from your usual style, Kala and I love it! Amazing. Thank you for participating in the bloghop! Hope you have fun!
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Dr.Amrita Basu · 299 weeks ago

Such a scary ending.God knows why such things are still sold in kirana stores!
A very fast paced thriller indeed
OMG that was so scary. You had me hanging on to every word.
dropping by from the bloghop
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Corinne Rodrigues · 299 weeks ago

With all that we read and hear about and the way you told this story, you had me glued and scared, Kala. So, so believable!
Thats so chilling and unsettling. I hope the girl reports the matter to police because she cant be lucky always.
Seriously didn't saw that coming. Definitely didn't expect the end like this. The scary truth told so clearly.
Wow-what a weave of story,
Wish this is not true.... but can understand as it must have happened sadly with someone.
I wish such window moments be part of no one life ever.
This was scary. But I love how wonderfully you've woven a story from the prompt. It was nice reading what you've written after a long time Kala.
This was so scary, Kala! God, I had goosebumps. I was going there was another reason why that stalker was stalking her. Very well written!
You got me in the end. It was a horrible thing to happen. Thankfully the clear glass windows saved the girl. But, what will happen the next day? Will that man be still standing there stalking her? Your storytelling kept me hooked on.
Oh goodness that was terrifying. It's been a coincidence that I've read two books recently that talked of acid attacks on women. Your post brought to life the trauma of it all. I'm just glad she escaped. You really weave a story well.
I was looking forward to a lovely romance - very Sathiya style - this ending was so so unexpected!! Your flow of the narration was so good Kala that I am not able to get this ending!! Sigh you broke my heart - sniff sniff! ;-)
Omg. Seriously don't understand what they get from acid attack..
Oh damn. Didn't expect that ending! So different from your style, K.
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Nabanita Dhar · 298 weeks ago

This just gave me the chills. But this is a reality, isn't it? We are lucky if we are not stalked. The things women and girls need to deal with and live with makes me angry and frustrated.
Oh my God, it's scary. Acid attacks give me chills.
OMG! That was scary! But unfortunately, it happens . I loved the way you told the story, it had me wanting to know how it ended.

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